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Offline betakapteng

My short story - Layers of Gambit
« on: July 27, 2025, 05:38:07 am »
I have written a short story, titling it "Layers of Gambit". Its written with a lot of help from ChatGPT. I just want to put that out there. Please see attached document for the story.

Comments welcomed. I am currently brainstorming ideas for a second book.
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Offline Trenacker

Re: My short story - Layers of Gambit
« Reply #1 on: July 30, 2025, 11:37:47 pm »
Hi there!

I took a quick scan. Looks like a nicely-written narrative.

It sucked me in fairly quickly. I liked the line about "Morganite lite" being fundamentally different than "Spartan" light, and especially the segue into the point that Morganites laugh seventeen times a day, and Spartans only three.

Give us more!
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Re: My short story - Layers of Gambit
« Reply #2 on: July 31, 2025, 12:09:12 am »
You'd do way better for views with the actual text in posts.  I have a novella-length, roughly, story I had to post in four chapters a while back, but that works fine, if length is a factor...
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